Descriptive Essay

The moon shined dimly. Wind blew through the opened window. Curtains fluttered, casting dancing shadows over the wall. Shadows stained the three posters on the wall. The room was messy. Things were strewn across everywhere. Socks and dirty laundry overflowing the laundry basket scattered on the floor. Collection of hats and coats hung messily on a hanger on the wall. Desk was covered with pens, papers, books, and a plate. Luxurious-looking red reading lamp on the desk stood foreign to the darkness of the room. A black office chair was laid quite far from the desk, in the middle of the room. On the bed against the wall, there were blue bed sheets, newspapers, and a jacket. A glass of water together with a pile of books and a clock radio laid on the small table beside the bed. The room could have been a lively place if it were not for the dusky moonlight and wind. A bright colored wooden dresser stood in one corner of the room. Vivid ornaments and some picture books were on the shelves above the dresser. The room also had a stereo and two speakers, along with a collection of CDs in a brown wine crate. Several concert tickets hung on a dark notice board on the wall above the stereo as well,

 

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Every student can benefit from engaging in extracurricular activities. In-class curriculums have clear limits on their kinds, form and their benefits. Those activities are inevitably biased on academic and theoretical knowledge. Therefore, extracurricular activities are necessary to supplement social and practical ability of students. For example, students can learn how to cooperate through extracurricular activities. When students play team sport as an extracurricular activity, they can learn to be unselfish and to have responsibility on their own parts in order to achieve success of the whole team. Such learning gives students life-long benefits; helping them not only during their school life, but also after graduation when they become social members. Students aren’t able to learn such importance and skills of cooperation on regular curriculum in-class activities are mostly consisted of individual studying and thinking. As shown in this example, extracurricular works are advantageous for students in that it teaches students practical knowledge. Thus, students should actively engage in extracurricular activities.